Follow Ups:Category: General Interest
From: punkster (Adam Link)
To: ALL
Date Posted: November 01, 2005 at 21:01:23
Subject: Song: Musings Of An Insomniac
Verse 1:
Same old story, heavy lids won’t drop.
Pitter Patter, when will the rain stop?
Crazy brain just won’t shut down.
Words don’t come, no verbs or nouns.Chorus:
Is this all just too contrived?
Forcing rhymes for no real reason
Why do words have to fit?
I’m just so sick of it!Verse 2:
Should I keep wasting this ink?
Tell me really, whaddya think?
Girls don’t see me, they stare right past.
Should I try a move? Would it be too fast?Chorus
Verse 3:
My Mind wanders, feeling alone.
Nobody to talk to on the phone
Friends surround me, they’re all here
Yet still I shed a lonely tear.Chorus
END
Please give any comments, good or bad. I'm not looking for everyone to say its good if they think its absolute pants! Please be honest as I wish to improve and one of the ways I can do that is by getting real feedback from people.
If you like it, why? Is it catchy? Do you like the message, can you relate? These sort of comments would be most useful.
If you hate it, why? Is it bland? Too contrived? A load of meaningless rubbish? Please share all your honest feelings about this song!